I really enjoyed this!
Yay! And thanks for your comment!

sometimes, during the long dialog exchanges, I lose track of who's saying what.
And yay! for constructive criticism ;)

Yeah, I need to watch for that. I used to go too far the other way and weighed down the dialogue extensively; it seems I've over-compensated, though, and you're not the first person to point it out.

Ah well. Learn from our mistakes, and all that. Thanks!

::scurries back to insert judiciously-placed Harry-saids ;) ::